I have been coming here since I was a kid.
This amusement park is my second home. I know everything about it. How long each ride runs, the speeds, in how many minutes does the ferris wheel reach the top, everything. In fact, the wheel was my first ride here, when my parents had brought me many many years ago. The wheel takes a slight pause at precisely 9 pm, when the power line switched. It is the best time to be in the top pod. Which is where I am. One last sight of the city.
Before the final plunge…
Word Count: 100
Prompt:
The Dark Netizen 
A non-death-defying stunt?
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The last line took my breath away..
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Very well written. WP won’t let me like any posts today but I do like it.
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A tragic story. Perhaps the saddest thing is the way his childhood memories of the Ferris wheel represent such a high point of his life that he chooses to take his own life there. How limited his experience of happiness must have been.
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The build up was very effective. Good one.
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OH! Very good. 🙂
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Such despair is breathtaking all by itself. Your build-up to that last line was wonderful.
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Memories of fairground rides, previously forgotten. I thank you. 🙂
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I echo the other commenters: such a build-up, full of details, and then the heart-breaking solution.
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Thank You! 🙂
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Oh, what a last line!!
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Glad you liked it! 😀
Thank You! 🙂
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At least he sounds contented. Better to depart that way.
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Or he’s so full of regret, that he’s given up! 😦
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Sad he got to that point. It’s going to be hard on the ride operator and some of the people who see him pass on by.
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I agree!
The old staff will definitely feel the loss! 😦
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That last line definitely left me teetering on the edge of my seat, at least!
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Thanks so much! 🙂
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Oh, no!
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That’s one way to go, but you left me wondering why
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He couldn’t bear the ride of life! 😦
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The return to youth and innocence one last time is powerful. I’ve read enough of your stories to expect a twist, but still well done.
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Thanks so much, Nobbinmaug! 🙂
I would hate for my stories to become predictable! 😦
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No, predictable stories are horrible. I didn’t mean to imply such. I just know with The Dark Netizen shit’s gonna get dark. There is no happy day on the Ferris Wheel, and I would be disappointed if there were.
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Too bad he is taking a plunge. The way he has planned everything, he could have found a good opportunity to work anywhere. Strange are the ways life functions.
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Indeed! 😦
He chose to give up
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wonderful!
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Thank You, Jelli! 😀 😀
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Ouch! This did not strike me as pre-suicidal so that last line was quite a surprise! I got more of an obsessive vibe from this, like you might possibly see in high functioning autism. Hope the plunge is on a bungee cord, or just a flowery way of saying the final half-spin of the wheel.
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That was a deep read into my story! 🙂
It is not a suicide though, but one last stop before the old life is left behind! 🙂
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Good to know. 😊
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Nice twist, generously tragic, what a great tale, you’ve got to be pleased with this one
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Nicely done. From a buildup of nostalgic memories to a tragic end.
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Thanks so much, Subroto! 🙂
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That could have gone anywhere. Beautiful writing!
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Effective slow build-up of mood and then the punch at the end. Very good.
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Ah, the build up and the punch at the end. So intense. Great job.
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Thanks so much, Kelley! 😀 🙂
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Truly tragic
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